I pondered until I couldn't ponder any more...
and then I deleted the first couple of paragraphs you just read and got right to the point with a stronger beginning.
There's a lesson in there. You only have a few moments to grab someone's attention. There is a lot to read, just in Idol - and a world of distractions. If you don't have a way to hook someone into wanting to read more, it doesn't matter how you close, because most people won't get there.
That's MY number 1 piece of advice going into Week 2.
The new topic is up: http://therealljidol.livejournal.com/954961.html
and please make sure that you stop by the Results thread to say goodbye to those leaving us this week: http://therealljidol.livejournal.com/954709.html