The structure is all over the place and the message seems to jump to follow.
But, like everything - there *is* some good in it. Mainly moralizing in narrative form and how much is too much - and how your personal politics impacts your writing.
You tend to see a lot about what someone values in their writing, even with fiction. But does your values drive the story or does the story drive itself? Can you pick the two apart at any point, or are they tangled together?
While you are thinking about that - there's an entry due on Tuesday - so make sure you are writing it! http://therealljidol.livejournal.com/1035875.html